• Kathy Joy
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    • Joined in January 2013
  • I am working on a serialised YA urban fantasy and looking for feedback on it in preparation for publication. I enjoy many fiction genres and so will happily read many ... Show More
  • Jennifer Flath commented on Chapter 17 :
    8/31/2017 6:52:54 PM
    I definitely would have stayed awake for the five years. Or at least I would have made it through a solid week of nothing else going wrong before I gave up and agreed to ... Show More
    (15 chapter reviews) | 926 +Votes
    My name is Reva Mallick. I was in a pod. I just woke up. Something is on the ship – it killed the crew. I need ... More Info
    Genres:
    Horror, Sci Fi
    • Kathy Joy Loads of exposition got cut to keep up the pace and flow but I feel a lot of it needs to be there so I need to figure out a way to put it back in while retaining the pace. The pods are on the bridge in case of emergency and the crew need to be put under. I'd agree if it were me five years awake would be my bet, but poor Reva is exhausted and wants everything to be over. I cannot believe how quickly you got through this! Whatever you're putting in your coffee - I need some! lol :p Thanks for following all the way through.
      8/31/2017 7:58:20 PM
  • Jennifer Flath commented on Chapter 18 :
    8/31/2017 6:49:45 PM
    It would have been nice to have one more moment with Adam after waking up or some indication he had followed her wishes and watched over her. But, phew, what a relief.
    (15 chapter reviews) | 926 +Votes
    My name is Reva Mallick. I was in a pod. I just woke up. Something is on the ship – it killed the crew. I need ... More Info
    Genres:
    Horror, Sci Fi
    • Kathy Joy Yeah I wasn't sure whether to add that or not. The idea of the last chapter is that it's supposed to be ambiguous like nothing confirms whether or not she is still dreaming or if she even made it, but I wanted to leave it this way so the reader could decide which they see it as.
      8/31/2017 7:53:41 PM
  • Jennifer Flath commented on Chapter 13 :
    8/31/2017 6:36:22 PM
    I'm not sure I follow Reva's logic on going back to cryosleep. If the ship needed a crew to make it to Proxima b, she's pretty much it right now. Getting those things off ... Show More
    (15 chapter reviews) | 926 +Votes
    My name is Reva Mallick. I was in a pod. I just woke up. Something is on the ship – it killed the crew. I need ... More Info
    Genres:
    Horror, Sci Fi
    • Kathy Joy The idea behind the bridge is its the last secure place left on the ship, and that's why she has to get there. I do think I should make it clearer why this is her objective. I have a bunch of feedback to take into account so I'm going to go back and make changes.Luckily so far nothing major needs to change. Thanks for following it, especially so close to the deadline!
      8/31/2017 7:52:12 PM
  • Jennifer Flath commented on Chapter 16 :
    8/31/2017 6:44:26 PM
    Losing communication was a really effective way to up the stakes.
    (15 chapter reviews) | 926 +Votes
    My name is Reva Mallick. I was in a pod. I just woke up. Something is on the ship – it killed the crew. I need ... More Info
    Genres:
    Horror, Sci Fi
    • Kathy Joy I decided Reva needed to fight this one alone. That was her final test.
      8/31/2017 7:48:05 PM
  • Jennifer Flath commented on Chapter 15 :
    8/31/2017 6:42:05 PM
    I wonder when the Gremlins started acting up and how long the crew held out against them. Prequel??
    (15 chapter reviews) | 926 +Votes
    My name is Reva Mallick. I was in a pod. I just woke up. Something is on the ship – it killed the crew. I need ... More Info
    Genres:
    Horror, Sci Fi
    • Kathy Joy That would be a good idea for a prequel. Not sure what I plan on doing with this, but it would be fun to explore.
      8/31/2017 7:47:24 PM
  • Maleaka Yuno commented on Chapter 18 :
    8/31/2017 6:32:13 PM
    OMG I am so sorry if I have missed the deadline I forgot!!!!! Planned to finish it at the weekend but thats too late. Great story. AWESOME twist. Got a real Alien vibe to ... Show More
    (15 chapter reviews) | 926 +Votes
    My name is Reva Mallick. I was in a pod. I just woke up. Something is on the ship – it killed the crew. I need ... More Info
    Genres:
    Horror, Sci Fi
    • Kathy Joy I think you made it in time. Even if you hadn't, don't worry about it. Glad you enjoyed the story. Also, sure, you can borrow Adam, it just might take 30 years for him to get here. Is that okay...?
      8/31/2017 7:41:42 PM
  • Jennifer Flath commented on Chapter 6 :
    8/31/2017 6:03:54 PM
    This is one of those stories where it's taking a lot of willpower not to peek at the end.
    (15 chapter reviews) | 926 +Votes
    My name is Reva Mallick. I was in a pod. I just woke up. Something is on the ship – it killed the crew. I need ... More Info
    Genres:
    Horror, Sci Fi
    • Kathy Joy Man I both love and hate stories like that. I don't have much in the way of willpower so it's a real struggle not to peek. It'd be better if you don't and see if you can guess the ending. Leave me any thought as you go.
      8/31/2017 7:40:20 PM
  • Jennifer Flath commented on Chapter 2 :
    8/31/2017 5:10:14 PM
    I'm going to squeeze some reading into August if it kills me! I so hope Reva defeats something by lecturing it on soil pH.
    (15 chapter reviews) | 926 +Votes
    My name is Reva Mallick. I was in a pod. I just woke up. Something is on the ship – it killed the crew. I need ... More Info
    Genres:
    Horror, Sci Fi
    • Kathy Joy You know perhaps one day we should write a character who wins their battles this way. I'd read something like that. I appreciate any reading you do but don't panic. If you don't get time, you don't get time. Life happens. I appreciate you checking out the first few chapters at least :)
      8/31/2017 7:39:09 PM
  • Denis Hopman commented on Chapter 18 :
    8/31/2017 2:00:07 PM
    Oh I didn't realize there was an epilogue! The ambiguity of the ending is a nice touch, as is tying that opening hook into the ending. I had been wondering about it. Congratulations and best of luck!
    (15 chapter reviews) | 926 +Votes
    My name is Reva Mallick. I was in a pod. I just woke up. Something is on the ship – it killed the crew. I need ... More Info
    Genres:
    Horror, Sci Fi
    • Kathy Joy Thanks. Yeah there was always going to be an open ended epilogue. Glad you enjoyed it.
      8/31/2017 7:38:03 PM
  • 8/31/2017 1:58:21 PM
    Overall this is an impressive story with plenty of merit. The ending was satisfying. Though I had my doubts about Adam, I did not ultimately guess that he was the AI. ... Show More
    (15 chapter reviews) | 926 +Votes
    My name is Reva Mallick. I was in a pod. I just woke up. Something is on the ship – it killed the crew. I need ... More Info
    Genres:
    Horror, Sci Fi
    • Kathy Joy I agree with you about Corinne. My plan is to redraft some of this to keep her in Reva's thoughts along with her sister. Also as for waking up another passenger this was something that was in the first few chapters but I took it out but based on feedback i know it is needed. The reason she doesn't do this is the only reason she is awake is her pod was damaged. Being woken this way is very dangerous so she is lucky to be alive in the first place. To wake another crew members might kill them, so Adam advised against it and Reva decided she couldn't risk killing a fellow passenger. As I say, this was in there and I took it out but I clearly need to work it back in. There are certainly influences from Alien (one of my favourite movies), so this is probably what a lot of people can see. Thank you for following the story this far and for your informative and helpful feedback. :)
      8/31/2017 7:37:14 PM
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